Statement of intent feedback

Eric

Mark: 4

Grade: D

Comments on Statement of Intent:

·         There are some interesting ideas here and you’ve clearly thought about aspects of the show. However, as a statement of intent it needs some organisation and quite a lot more detail to reach the top levels.

·         For a start, no title or introductory elements. Also, your narrative isn’t clear. How does it fit the crime genre?

·         Use bullet points, subheadings or similar to organise your ideas into sections. This is just a massive lump of text!

·         You have mentioned some aspects of media language (e.g. mise-en-scene) but I want to see much more. Planned camera shots, sound, editing. You need to be specific. Choose shots with real significance/connotations that tell the audience a lot about your narrative/character/setting.

·         Audience – is 16-30 a family audience?

·         You need more theory in the statement – or perhaps just develop the theory you’ve got. For example, I don’t understand your application of Baudrillard.

·         Representation and stereotypes a major missing factor. This needs a specific section, some theory and real detail.

·         Culture magazine planning is completely missing – this is half the coursework brief!

·         You need to address digital convergence too – it’s in the mark scheme.

Next steps:

·         Copy and paste this feedback to your Media 2 coursework blog with the title ‘Statement of Intent feedback and learner response’.

·         As your learner response, pick out the three improvements/changes you need to make to your Statement of Intent.

·         Re-draft your statement of intent using Microsoft Word.

What I will do:

• Add in information about the magazine
• Change the target audience to 12+
• Add in more theory into the statement of intent