1) Type up your teacher's feedback in full plus a summary of the comments you received from other students in the class.
Nice opening shots and jump cuts
Opening dialogue not entirely convincing - would two females approach a man randomly asking for a card trick
Audio the main issue - levels background noises etc.
Camerawork and editing for the card trick needs a lot more shots/pace. If either needs to be quick or the audience need to be able to follow the trick
2) Using a combination of your own reflection on the preliminary exercise and the feedback you were given, write three WWW bullet points and three EBI bullet points for your TV drama scene. WWW:
clever use of cinematography
all aspects of mise-en-scene fitted with the concept of the drama
clever narrative
EBI:
sound/audio quality issue-use
Use one device
Choose a different song
3) How effectively did you complete the objective you laid out in your mini preliminary exercise statement of intent? Effective to a certain extent, the actual story line seemed to play through but perhaps a bit unrealistic in terms of real life scenarios. 4) What have you learned from the preliminary exercise that will help you in the actual coursework project? To definitely only use one device. To spread out my timings for filming and to find well chosen setting to film on. This in particular goes towards any of the dialogue scenes as it may be difficult to hear the actual conversation that is key to the narrative. 5) Now you have completed the preliminary exercise, will you change anything in your actual TV drama trailer? This could include narrative, character and script or technical elements such as mise-en-scene, camerawork and sound.
Yes. The destination would most likely change into something indoors due to wind and traffic sounds. Another thing i would change for sure would be the usage of one device only as the quality in both sound and visuals. As for the characters, I would most likely choose to keep them the same as it fits the narrative.
1) State the genre you have chosen for your TV drama - family or crime drama. Crime2) Choose at least three TV dramas similar to your concept and watch the trailer and one scene from each. Make bullet-point notes on everything you watch, commenting on camerawork, editing, sound and mise-en-scene.
Deception:
Handheld camera shots - reflect realism
Montage sequence - typical convention of trailers ( fade to black)
Introduction to main characters and clearly distinguishable character types
Female FBI agent - subvert traditional characters of secret agents as well as stereotypes of women being fragile and less intelligent than men
Narrator ( Voice Over)- traditionally a movie convention so it’s unique for a trailer to use it
Clearly established hybrid genre of crime, comedy and drama- with quick remarks from main protagonist (The illusionist)
Uses clips/ scenes from actual drama to create the trailer- helps build intrigue with the enigma
Established colour scheme of black, red and gold- magic related colours
We see narrative strands that blend together
significantly longer length than conventional trailers
Stunts - reflect main themes (magic and illusion) of the series
Captions appear towards the end of the trailer- perhaps to build and inform audiences more about the show
Editing- pace picks up as captions are introduced , as well as action
Character relationships introduced
Character personalities introduced
Breaking bad:
Lighting and mise-en-scene reflect the lifestyle of protagonist - dark lighting and typical home setting suggest he has a normal life
Hand held camera- reflects raw home life and suggests how this series is based on a single characters life events
Caption design (editing) hint to the main theme of the series
Wide shots and establishing shots- show the lifestyle and comfort of the protagonist
Simple sentences for the captions- easy to understand and and read
Montage sequence- conventional
Disequilibrium shown in the middle of the trailer- balance
Mise-en-scene and lighting shows change in character
Fast paced editing and straight cuts to show the impact of the drug lifestyle
Zoom out from gun shot - enigma - Who is he shooting at ?
Shots from past life to present life-contrast
Music in the background intensifies as the disequilibrium takes place-editing matches with the pace of the music
End credits show up at the end
Peaky blinders:
Slow paced editing/ scenes at the start- establish setting and characters
Dark lighting- dull and gloomy lifestyles and character backgrounds
Closeups of documents- link to character identities
Closeup of money- theme of series
Props - miseenscene- hat has a significance- macguffin?
Birds eye view shots - secrecy
Music intensifies as plot intensifies
Extreme closeups - character expressions
Closeups of protagonist face- show his character type
Period drama - costume and setting effectively reflect post war
Dark colour scheme- darkness within the series ?
Fire is heavily shown
Music-matches pace of editing towards the end
End credits shown right at the end - convention
3) Write a script for your TV drama scene.
Mid day afternoon in an underground alleyway. CHLOE and MIA walk up to LUCIFER who is doing some card tricks. Both attentions are caught with a flashy cardistry move. The pair approach LUCIFER. The familiar sound of passing cars are heard in the background.
MIA
Hey, can we see a trick?
LUCIFER
Yeah sure. Why not? Okay, let’s start, would you like to shuffle the deck or do you trust me enough to shuffle it?
MIA
I’m no good with shuffling, let Chloe shuffle it.
[LUCIFER hands the deck over to CHLOE who gives it a few cuts] [CHLOE then hands the deck back over]
LUCIFER
Okay, let’s take the first card of the deck. [Double lift to reveal the second card] [Flips it back over] Chloe what card is this?
CHLOE
The ‘whatever the double lifted card is’
[LUCIFER points at MIA]
MIA
Mia.
LUCIFER
Can you bring out your hand and hold onto the ‘repeat the double lifted card’. Now Chloe,can you hold onto the rest of the deck?
CHLOE
Yeah. [takes out a palm and LUCIFER places the rest of the deck on her palm]
LUCIFER
Just to make sure I get nowhere near those cards [V grip on CHLOE’s phone in pocket] put your other hand on top and squeeze tightly and I want you to go a few steps away.
CHLOE
[Takes a few quick steps back while her phone slips out of her pocket] Is this far enough?
[LUCIFER quickly pockets the phone]{LUCIFER then clicks on top of the card]
LUCIFER
And it’s done.
MIA & CHLOE
What’s done?
LUCIFER
The trick. Mia, slowly take away your hand and flip over the card. [She does as told and is shocked to see a different card on her hand]
MIA
What… Just… Happened…? [Confused look]
Now Chloe can you slowly lift your palm and show us the top card of the deck that I have not touched since giving it to you. [CHLOE also does as told to see the original card now sitting at the top of the deck]
CHLOE
I had this is my hands the whole time though [confused look]
{the two parties part ways and LUCIFER waves the phone around behind their back]
4) Write a shot list containing EVERY shot you plan to film AND additional shots to create flexibility when editing. These additional shots are often close-ups, cutaways, alternative angles or similar. I advise using a simple table on Microsoft Word to set out your shot list.
Shot Number
Shot
Filmed?
Used?
1
Mid shot of cardistry flourish
Yes
No
2
Long shot of the 2 girls walking down
Yes
Yes
3
Over the shoulder when Mia asks to see a trick
Yes
Yes
4
Close up of Chloe shuffling the cards
Yes
Yes
5
Mid shot of the first part of the trick
Yes
Yes
6
Mid shot of passing the deck over to Chloe and moving her out of the
way
Yes
Yes
7
Close up of Lucifer’s hand in Chloe’s pocket
Yes
Yes
8
Close up of the phone slipping out and Lucifer pocketing it
Yes
Yes
9
Tracking shot of Chloe walking her few steps away
Yes
Yes
10
Close up of the click on top of the cards
Yes
Yes
11
Mid shot of Mia reaction
Yes
Yes
12
Zoom out reaction of both Mia and Chloe
Yes
Yes
13
Long shot of Lucifer walking away with the phone in his hand.
Yes
No
5) Plan your mise-en-scene: what iconography are you including to ensure your audience understands the genre? Plan your cast, costume, make-up, props, lighting and setting. For this preliminary task, use just one location to keep it simple.
The use of colour reflects the type of person each
character is. With characters like lucifer wearing all black to show that sense
of mystery and with Chloe and Mia wearing coloured clothing allows a more
vibrant and cheerful vibe coming from them Lucifer looks a bit like the matrix, not
intentional but gives it a nice ‘cool’ vibe to it Deck of cards is key as it is the initial trigger
to the entire encounter to lead to the actions that were taken place The setting is in Northolt inside one of the underpasses.
This gives it a raw feeling and the setting defines the type of areas the
character Lucifer likes to stay in to find easy targets to pick pocket.
6) Plan a shooting schedule that will ensure everything is filmed by the deadline
All shots within the shot list are filmed in Northolt underpass and will be filmed on the 10th October 2019
Will have Daisy Roscoe and Tamzin Martin starring , alongside Eric Wong
1) Type up your feedback in full including the ratings out of five for each of the six categories. Research - 4 Concept - 4 Lang - 2 Rep - 4 Audience + Industries - 3 Delivery - 2
I like the title and tagline... but I read it as friendly rather than ominous!
Card trick element is great - a really nice aspect and offers 'difference' (Neale)
Clearly excellent research and time into the concept but delivery is a little reliant on cards (more script reading than notes). Structure is solid.
Great to see Van Zoonen applied and a very positive ideas in terms of representation.
More theory in there but not all explained - E.g. hyperreality needs more explanation.
Pickpocket element would need to be handled carefully.
Does 16-30 audience meet the brief?
C4 works for this concept but social media points are too general with no specific ideas for your concept.
Lacking in terms of media language - this is an area you would need to address in statement of intent.
Q+A - initial closed question but then handles next Q nicely. Does rather suggest a lack of planning of some elements which you can address in the statement of intent.
2) Use this feedback, comments from peers and your own reflection on your presentation to self-assess and write a detailed WWW and EBI for your own coursework concept and presentation as a whole. WWW:
Concept and Media language is very solid
Unique concept
Considered international audiences
Good applications of media theories
Detailed character narrative
EBI:
Tagline and title are very similar
Look up ad make eye contact
How will you communicate roles?
How will the drama wrap up
Talk about the near end episode
3) Write a paragraph discussing how your presentation will lead into your actual coursework production. Do you need to update your statement of intent? Does your narrative offer enough clarity? Is it appropriate for the audience specified in the brief? Does it fit the genre you are aiming for? Can you add media terminology or theory to your statement of intent now you have reflected on your presentation and seen others?
I think my delivery definitely needs working on with more confidence in speaking and making eye contact with the audience. I know that I will change the amount of episodes in my drama. After listening to some feedback after my presentation, it seems like 20 episodes will be far too long and I have decided to change it to a 7 episode drama instead. I feel like my concept is fitting for the genre I am aiming for but more media terminology would help with the overall understanding of how the trailer would be shot.
